written and posted by members of Lancashire Dead Good Poets' Society

Saturday, 5 October 2024

Footsteps In The Fog

Given that for most people, sight is the predominant sense, it's perhaps not surprising that this week's theme of   footsteps  haevoked primarily a visual response, with the metaphorical a close second. But I'm much more intrigued by the audible possibilities inherent in the idea, especially as we are now entering the season of mists and mellow spookiness, and my local supermarket is already well stocked with pumpkins and pumpkin-carving kits, ghoul masks, festoons of spiders-web and tubs of trick-or-treat sweets. (Oh, capitalism! Don't we love you.) 

Isn't the sound of footsteps way more intriguing as a stimulus to the imagination than the mere sight of them? 

Close your eyes. What do you hear? Whose footsteps could they be? What are they like? Where are they coming from? Where are they going to? Why have they stopped? And what do they want with you? 


With the scene suitably set, it's straight to the poem after this busy Saturday (and Blackpool were absolutely rubbish away at Mansfield by the way). Are you sitting uncomfortably? I don't know what this is about., a distempered sort of piece, definitely league three stuff. I wanted atmosphere, I wanted to name-check the London of Eliot and Dickens, I wanted vixens, I wanted a murder mystery. Well three out of four is not bad...but has it been worth it, after all?  

Beneath My Window
Outside my dingy Soho rooms, winter fog
curls and slides like a stealthy brindled fox, 
pauses, peering in, malingering at that gap

I always leave no matter what. I lie awake 
past midnight languid in uncurtained dark,
feeling its cool play over my face, listening.

Old Eliot surely would have understood,
even older Dickens too, who liked to pad
along these narrow alleyways following

at distance the clatter of clogs on cobbles,
keenly observing London's nocturnal lowlife
in its habitat, but never in such a peasouper.

I hear stilettos stab unsteadily up the street,
they pause beneath my window. I recognise
that walk. In case you're wondering if I'm

lying lonely up here, holding a torch for you,
hoping you'll ring the bell, sorry to disappoint.
Go to hell with you tonight, dipsy Demoiselle.

Wander away down the Lane if you will. Piss
if you must in someone else's porch. Softer
footfalls stop, a voice mutters. You utter that

scornful laugh I know so well and totter off
to earth, to sleep, to sober up. Soon vixens
rule the gutters. Street lamps sputter, Silence.


...and did I say that Blackpool were rubbish today? Onwards.

Thanks for reading, S ;-)

20 comments:

Melissa Davy said...

An interesting read. And Blackpool were woeful, I agree. The Bruce bounce has gone.

Binty said...

The ladies you know... (lol)

terry quinn said...

Love the Footsteps in the Fog image.
I think there is a poem in there.
Give Brucey a chance.

Deke Hughes said...

Blimey Steve. If that's league three stuff, heaven help us. I must admit I was waiting for the blood-curdling scream.

Jen McDonagh said...

I rather like the poem, specially the foggy fox part.

Billy Banter said...

We don't make fogs like we used to! 🤣

Lizzie Fentiman said...

This made me think of noir thrillers. I like 'dipsy Demoiselle'. Sorry about your team.

Mark II Ford said...

I like the poem.

Anonymous said...

Don't scrap the poem. I'm sure you'll figure out how to develop it.

Cynthia said...

I like the edgy mood and references to Eliot and Dickens padding behind the workers. Two thoughts, clatter or spark in place of hobble. Uncurtained dark, leave out muffled or place elsewhere.

Kate Eggleston-Wirtz said...

Very atmospheric Steve - stealthy brindled fox - brilliant. Wonder what the lady would be wearing...red, leopard skin, slinky black? :)

Steve Rowland said...

I did in the end develop the poem, making some changes (thanks to my Stanza friends for their input) and adding a couple of extra stanzas. I feel happier with it now (league two perhaps).

Kate, I'm sure the lady would have been wearing a black evening dress and a rather moth-eaten fox fur stole,

Saskia Parker said...

I love the poem Steve. ❤️

CI66Y said...

That's now a great poem. I read version one when you originally posted. This reworking is the business.

Debbie Laing said...

I agree with you. The audible allows the imagination more possibilities than the visible and I think your poem demonstrates that. Also I loved the alliteration.

Anonymous said...

Peasouper? Sounds disgusting. I imagine people coughing and spitting on the sidewalk - better heard than seen.

Kerry Mahon said...

Yes, hearing leaves more to the imagination. I like the atmosphere you created, and the recurring fox theme.

James Wilsher said...

A good poem. Assume the Lane is Drury Lane. Is it in any way autobiographical?

Lynne Carter said...

Beautifully atmospheric. I can almost smell that fog (cough, cough).

Charlotte Mullins said...

A lovely foggy blog.