written and posted by members of Lancashire Dead Good Poets' Society

Saturday 30 November 2019

Tanka

09:33:00 Posted by Steve Rowland , , , 20 comments
Cooler than haiku, the tanka is a classical Japanese verse-form that predates its more famous friend. Flouting the oriental artistic maxim that 'less is more', it expands into five lines (adding a couplet to the haiku's three). That said, it still demands sufficient brevity and adherence to its syllabic rules (5/7/5-7/7) to make the writer work to achieve an effective poem.

Those of you kind enough to read my stuff with any regularity will know that my default style is what I term contemporary lyricism, poetry falling somewhere between a fixed rhyme scheme and free verse, employing variable meter and stress, internal rhymes and assonance to create a thematic and rhythmic flow. Writing a tanka for this week's blog proved an interesting discipline. I've created one, as you'll find below, but my notebook is scattered with a dozen attempts and alternate takes as I wrestled to make it both meaningful and succinct.

In classical Japanese verse, both haiku and tanka generally concerned themselves with observations on nature; the tanka, by virtue of its two extra lines, afforded some space for reflection on the observation. I've tried at least to adhere to the spirit of that tradition in my own composition.

In a week when scientists have once again issued dire warnings about the seriousness of greenhouse-gases and their impact on global warming, and as the political parties in the UK general election have been addressing the problem of climate change in their manifestos, I figured that is where my focus should lie.


This, then, is all about mankind's short-sighted fossil fuel foolishness which threatens eventually to make a funeral pyre of our pretty planet unless there is a concerted change of attitude and agenda.

Petrol Tanka
Sure is a stern test
of how mature a species
we may prove to be:
fossil fuelled cinderball
or green paradise regained?

That's all folks, thanks for reading, S ;-)

20 comments:

Boz said...

incendiary la! :)

Deke Hughes said...

Do you know what? I feel a bit short changed by this. Take it as a compliment. The information about tanka poetry is interesting, of course, but your five-liner left me wanting more.

Ben Templeton said...

Well done Steve. A clever idea as well as a most pertinent one, reinforced by the graphic picture and the imagery of your closing couplet - 'fossil fuelled cinderball' is brilliant.

CI66Y said...

I wasn't familiar with the tanka so thanks for the introduction. As for your Petrol Tanka, I think it cleverly poses the salient question of the age - to burn or not to burn!

Anonymous said...

Great blog, love the poem - made me feel guilty as I notched the central heating up this morning!!!

Debbie Laing said...

Witty and wise. Well said Steve :)

GV (Vance) said...

Very good. Meaningful and succint, as you intended Steve.

Kenny Garcia said...

Spot on Steve. Breaking news from COP25 climate change conference in Madrid - greenhouse gas concentrations (CO2, Methane, Nitrous Oxide) all reach new high levels and in last 25 years there has been a 43% increase in the warming effect on the global climate from these gases :-(

Tom Shaw said...

It saddens me that my country, which originated the movement for green thinking in the 60s (Stewart Brand and the Whole Earth Catalog etc) now has a president who has reneged on the Paris Treaty, claiming that global warming is a myth just because it suits big business and the fossil fuel industries' agenda. Trump is inviting us all to the Cinderball - what a great image that was Steve, It deserves a global platform.

Matt West said...

There's almost nothing to a tanka is there buddy? Easy Saturday for you (LOL).

Anonymous said...

You make a pithy point Steve. That said, I much prefer your longer, lyrical poems :)

Max Page said...

Petrol Tanka nails it for me!

Anonymous said...

Send your poem to Extinction Rebellion mate.

Harry Lennon said...

Interesting Steve. I agree with another comment above that 'fossil fuelled cinderball' is one hell of an image.

Tony Stanford said...

Succinct! Love it.

The Existentialist said...

Don't think that even the wisest words can change stupid minds. What will be will be.

Lizzie Fentiman said...

Well said Steve. Some of us have a taste of the cinderball effect already -worst wildfires in memory in Oz, bigger and earlier than in previous years. Come on, world!

Matt West said...

That's good! Send it to that Rita Thornbird woman. 👍

Anonymous said...

A visual pun - love it.

Rochelle said...

Australia is burning. That ought to be warning enough. Welcome to the cinderball!